12 hours 1st draft feedback

Overall our 1st draft is a very rough version of what we hope to have for the final piece. we wanted to experiment with different camera shots and techniques in order to see what the audience liked and didn't like. We showed our rough edit (1st draft) to our class. our class is made up of a group of 16-17 year olds and so as this fitted into our target audience it meant that we could see more clearly how it was interpreted. We recieved quite abit of constructive criticism. This was good because it showed us clearly what we'd done wrong and also what we needed to do to turn this around. the night scene went down really well with our audience and so we've decided to extend the length of the night scene and shorten the morning scene. The shot of the kitchen was said to be "boring" and so we've decided to concentrate less on what the protagonist is doing and concentrate more or different shots and techniques. A lot of the night scene will be left the same but alot of the morning scene will be changed. we will be adding in new shots and have decided as a group to start from scratch and refilm the whole thing.